It's kind of narrative.  Although I like the story of it, it doesn't quite feel "special enough" right now.  Any comments are appreciated.  I might need to cut it up.
The Snow Queen
the rope, she said, is to catch you when you fall through
at the pond behind the Berenger’s
Claire’s mother knotted Claire’s double bladed skates
 
(for babies her mother said) after Claire 
failed five times, blue mittens between her teeth
her mother fastened a clothesline 
around Claire’s waist 
and shoved 
large hand between the shoulder blades
Claire rocked forward
until she hit her knees (the ice so, so hard)
or Claire swooped
until her breath punched out of her jaws
her mother sat smoking 
on her plaid blanket 
among the iced weeds
staring over Claire’s red knit cap
at the starlings shaking the snow from the pines
Claire watched her as she flew past, wondered 
if the line were strong enough

 
 
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