Monday, January 12, 2009

Didi painted a picture of me!

and I wrote a poem, again. I should show you the first draft -- it's so different, it's amazing. My mind tends to wander and things get weirder and weirder.
It's for a homework assignment for Joanna Furman's class -- a poem in one sentence. I actually did two of these.

At the Second Accident

I leave the engine running, the driver's
side door open, and I don't float --

I sink, the water not as cold
as I imagined, but brown and golden

underneath, filled with specks and slow
moving leaves and things that sparkle

and dart and I hear shouting and I'm
lifted by my ponytail and I'm out

of the water and you have your arms
and a blanket draped around me

and I think we're alone, but flashbulbs
keep going off, and I'm apologizing for

something I can't remember, and
you say, it's alright, that's what
credit cards are for, anyway.


Matt Dioguardi said...

Eerie and very real. It gave me shivers.

&e said...

wow that was amazing. Very raw, and very realistic. Thanks.

&e -

Valerie Loveland said...

This is great. The part about the ponytail was a good surprise.

A poem in one sentence is an interesting idea.

Cool painting!