Monday, January 12, 2009

Didi painted a picture of me!

and I wrote a poem, again. I should show you the first draft -- it's so different, it's amazing. My mind tends to wander and things get weirder and weirder.
It's for a homework assignment for Joanna Furman's class -- a poem in one sentence. I actually did two of these.

At the Second Accident

I leave the engine running, the driver's
side door open, and I don't float --

I sink, the water not as cold
as I imagined, but brown and golden

underneath, filled with specks and slow
moving leaves and things that sparkle

and dart and I hear shouting and I'm
lifted by my ponytail and I'm out

of the water and you have your arms
and a blanket draped around me

and I think we're alone, but flashbulbs
keep going off, and I'm apologizing for

something I can't remember, and
you say, it's alright, that's what
credit cards are for, anyway.


Matt Dioguardi said...

Eerie and very real. It gave me shivers.

Anonymous said...

wow that was amazing. Very raw, and very realistic. Thanks.

&e -

Valerie Loveland said...

This is great. The part about the ponytail was a good surprise.

A poem in one sentence is an interesting idea.

Cool painting!