tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post8163764150032386964..comments2024-03-26T17:30:19.166-04:00Comments on this is all your fault: Christine E. Hamm, Poet Professor Painterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05718251845657390735noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-91180968286274048612008-07-17T01:32:00.000-04:002008-07-17T01:32:00.000-04:00Thanks, Maggie. I've worked in a place a little l...Thanks, Maggie. I've worked in a place a little like this. Nightmare.<BR/><BR/>Dishwasher! Thanks for your comment. I so admire your writing -- it means a lot.<BR/><BR/>Valerie -- you are very right about the beautiful line. I cut in the next draft. Thanks.Christine E. Hamm, Poet Professor Painterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05718251845657390735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-45480625553021414952008-07-10T01:23:00.000-04:002008-07-10T01:23:00.000-04:00I see I'm not the only one who has been thinking a...I see I'm not the only one who has been thinking a lot about this story. I like this poem. <BR/><BR/>When I was reading the first stanza, I skipped the line about the coffee machine and read it as "the nurses' station is broken."<BR/><BR/>I think "you were beautiful and you<BR/>knew it" is not necessary because the actions around that line show this.<BR/><BR/>Also I like the stanza about Cheers, Valerie Lovelandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11309299429765944601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-1428362965096026412008-07-08T23:54:00.000-04:002008-07-08T23:54:00.000-04:00i like this poem a great deal. Tied down to concre...i like this poem a great deal. Tied down to concrete images and plain language, it still yearns for flight and achieves it.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Of course, I like poems about dying.<BR/><BR/><BR/>But really it is a question of does the poem stand on its own two legs and this does.<BR/><BR/><BR/><BR/>thanks for the read.<BR/><BR/><BR/><BR/>yrs-<BR/><BR/>tearfultearful dishwasherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13436954924992728636noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-25371046248952648032008-07-08T21:11:00.000-04:002008-07-08T21:11:00.000-04:00this reminds me so much of my grandparents assiste...this reminds me so much of my grandparents assisted living home...a hard place to go, harder to stay.Maggie Mayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14699674732274478502noreply@blogger.com