tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post6065308384310914008..comments2024-03-26T17:30:19.166-04:00Comments on this is all your fault: Christine E. Hamm, Poet Professor Painterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05718251845657390735noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-46123511227226683682007-03-10T19:35:00.000-05:002007-03-10T19:35:00.000-05:00Valerie -- yes, acrylic tips, that's much better -...Valerie -- yes, acrylic tips, that's much better -- you're right.<BR/><BR/>Rethabile -- thanks for commenting! Let's hope it works. It's a big contest. If I win I get to be queen -- sort of.Christine E. Hamm, Poet Professor Painterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05718251845657390735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-78576458455902845182007-03-10T19:13:00.000-05:002007-03-10T19:13:00.000-05:00Send it in and win. It's a good poem. Coming into ...Send it in and win. It's a good poem. Coming into it, the first time I automatically read "left the blow-dryers on full" and had to go back and start the line. Don't know what that means, I suppose I mistook the "put" for a past tense. Good luck. Solid work.Rethabilehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03523368313680103826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-24712972728062831502007-03-09T14:05:00.000-05:002007-03-09T14:05:00.000-05:00I like this a lot--great images in this one. I lov...I like this a lot--great images in this one. I love the mounds of bleached curls, cars like shining eggs, sprouting wings, and especially the borough <BR/>that is shaped like two clasped hands.<BR/><BR/>There were 2 spots that didn't seem quite right to me. Puddles of nail polish remover is a little weird to me since it is either in a bottle or dabbed onto a cotton ball for use. I also thought Valerie Lovelandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11309299429765944601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-37884125444731716642007-03-08T23:06:00.000-05:002007-03-08T23:06:00.000-05:00Thank you Sam!! I actually have a rewrite of this...Thank you Sam!! I actually have a rewrite of this already -- I'll post it soon. The lines break are as you suggested, they're just not showing up in the post on the blog for some reason. I killed some thes. ("the's"Christine E. Hamm, Poet Professor Painterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05718251845657390735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3394939.post-9298750019653342882007-03-08T19:55:00.000-05:002007-03-08T19:55:00.000-05:00I like this poem. Good motion in the lines. Good...I like this poem. Good motion in the lines. Good ending. I like the imagery. One suggestion - a minor one - for this section:<BR/><BR/>they rise up over the 99 cent stores<BR/>the dry cleaners the funeral parlors<BR/>the basketball courts and the bodegas<BR/><BR/>the bridges humming with cars like shining eggs<BR/><BR/>the subway lines singing their mechanical vibrato<BR/><BR/>"The" appears 7sam of the ten thousand thingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04378206265831223396noreply@blogger.com